Senin, 23 Mei 2011

My Self

Writing 1 Activity
Describing My Self
Process: 3

THIS IS ME

            Hi, I am Dewi Putri Rahmayani. Everyone calls me Dewi or Mery. I was born in Padang on December 24th, 1991. I am 19 years old.  I  lives at Bahari Street 24, Ulak Karang. I live there with my parents.
            I have a tan skin. Then, I am in medium height and weight. It is around 165 centimeters tall and 50 kilograms weight. I have brown eyes and a flat nose. I think I am good-looking and fashionable also.
            I have a big family. I have three brothers and three sisters. My oldest and my middle sisters had marry. My second sister, Lisa,  is in Batam now. She is working in one of a company. My third brother, Hendra, is in here. He is working in a traditional market. Then, my fourth sister, Nelvi,  is in here also but not in Ulak Karang. She lives in Komp. Bungo Mas, By Pass. She is a nurse in RSUP M. Djamil, Padang. Next, my fifth brother, Riki, is in Jakarta. He is working in bank. My last brother, Dian, is in Jakarta also. He is a student in UIN Syarif Hidayatullah. He is studying Math. The last one is me. I am studying at State University of Padang. I am studying English literature. I am in second semester now.
            My hobby is watching TV. I always spend my free time in front of TV. I usually watch TV until midnight. I like listening to the music also. Sometimes, I am singing when I am taking a bath. I think my voice is not too bad. I can sing very well. It does not make your ears hurt actually. You will excited when you hear my voice.
            I am a shy girl. I always feel nervous when I am talking with someone that I just know. I do not know why actually. Besides, I am a good girl also. I like helping my friends. Sometimes they are utilized it for their personal interests. As you know I really hate that person.
            I think that is all about me. I hope you want to make a friend with me after you know my personality. Once more, do not judge someone by the cover.
             




7 komentar:

  1. hi dewi,
    I think your essay is good enough...
    but I think in paragraph one too many dot why you don't change the sentence into complex...

    that's all ..
    thanks..
    don't forget to comment my blog too..

    BalasHapus
  2. hii dewi..
    you have a good essay.it is better if you make your conclusion be long..it is so short.

    you can write about your experience.
    your essay seems like about your family not about you.

    please comment my blog.

    BalasHapus
  3. hi dewi...
    it is a good essay...
    but be careful of your grammar...

    "I lives at Bahari Street 24, Ulak Karang."
    the correct is I live, not I lives...

    thanks....

    BalasHapus
  4. haii dewii..
    look at paragraph 1 line 3
    "I lives at Bahari Street 24, Ulak Karang. I live there with my parents. "
    i thinks I LIVE, without "s"

    and give more information in conclusion..

    please comment on my blog..
    thanks.. :)

    BalasHapus
  5. Your essay is interesting ...
    Hosever i can fid some mistakes...
    Let see,,,
    "I lives", you should write i live ...
    "I have a tan skin", it is not a good topic sentence for the second paragraph...
    So far so good , thanks ..

    BalasHapus
  6. hi dewi,
    I think your essay is good enough...

    it is better if you make your conclusion be long..it is so short.


    keep writing :)

    BalasHapus
  7. hiiii dewi....

    i think tour essay is good enouh,, eventhough i find many mistakes for this,,please make your essay more clear with common vocabulary that you have....i find some uncommon words for this....

    try it...

    BalasHapus